With recent development in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear. What is your opinion?

While
some people argue that
paper
books
, newspapers and
magazines
will disappear
due to
advancement
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advancements
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in technology like
e-book
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e-books
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and news platforms, others believe that it will never disappear from
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in the foreseeable future. In my perspective, online
platroms
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platforms
and ebooks will replace
paper
books
in the future. There are many developments in
technolgy
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technology
such
as mobile phones , computers and laptops which
makes
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make
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things much easier, faster and more accessible
into
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in
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the bunch of
imformation
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information
on
the
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online platforms. It can be seen that many
paper
magazines
and newspapers
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been
disapeared
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disappeared
from the shelves over the
last
twenty years
due to
advent
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the advent
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of mobile phones and high-speed internet. The biggest example is that since Iphone released in 2011,
the
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many press companies globally
has
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have
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shifted to online
form
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forms
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.
However
, some people, particularly older ones prefer
paper
books
and
magazines
rather than ebooks or online
magazines
because technology is not familiar and practical for
these generation
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due
its
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excessive
maintanance
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maintenance
and affordability.
For example
, ebooks need to be downloaded, and
its
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their
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devise
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should be charged,
software
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and software
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need
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to
updated
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frequently. These things make
challenging
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it challenging
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for
these generation
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this generation
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. In
conclusiion
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conclusion
,
i
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I
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believe that e-technologies will take over
the
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paper based
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products, because
young
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the young
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generations
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generation
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is growing up
by
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apply
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using these technologies, and it is not practical
using
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to use
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paper
books
for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recent development
  • e-books
  • printed media
  • thing of the past
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • tangible
  • tactile
  • save trees
  • reduce waste
  • nostalgia
  • sentimental value
  • eye strain
  • screen fatigue
  • authentic
  • aesthetic appeal
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