The diagram indicates the life process of the honey bee

The diagram indicates the life process of the honey bee
The diagram indicates the life
process
of the
honey
bee
from
egg
to maturity age.
Overall
, the diagram explains the life cycle
for
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the
honey
bee
, which takes 34-36
days
. The first step of
process
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the process
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starts with the laying
honey
bee
between 2-3 eggs every three
days
.
Second,
the eggs remain between 9-10
days
, and
after
this
time, eggs hatch and
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the bee
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bee
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bees
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throws
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off. The
bee
remains attached
in
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their
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its
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egg
until it totally
separated
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from the
egg
after 5
days
, After the separation from the
egg
,
bee
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becomes independent and young for 7
days
. Afterwards, it becomes
more
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bigger and transforms into young adults after 9
days
. They are able to engage in the
process
of formation of
honey
with others.
Finally
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after 4
days
they become mature and
be
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able to emerge in the full action of the
honey
production. In conclusion, the time for life cycles of
honey
is make
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in
short
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a short
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time, as it takes almost one month to be able to engage
to
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the full
process
of
honey
production.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, honey, bee, egg, days with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "indicates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollination
  • Ecosystems
  • Metamorphosis
  • Larva
  • Pupa
  • Nectar
  • Pollen
  • Foraging
  • Hive
  • Cell
  • Workers
  • Drones
  • Queen Bee
  • Mating Flight
  • Capped Cell
  • Colony
  • Reproduction
  • Brood
  • Apiary
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