The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph provides information about the demand
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fiber
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types
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people around the world over the period from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
it is clear that
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cotton
and polyester were the most popular types of
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textile
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over the 8 years.
Whereas
the cellulosic and the wool were the least of all four types. To start,
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cotton
stood at
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million
tons
demand rate
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polyester started
around
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5
million
tons
.
After
this
, the
cotton
slightly increased to 25
million
tons
and
then
it a little bit
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in 2000, and grew again to 32
million
tons
in 2015.
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,
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polyester began with
lower
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point of demand from
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cotton
, it experienced a
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rise over the 8 years and stood at almost 70
million
tons
in the final year. Turning to,
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cellulosic and
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wool were the least in the time period, they started nearly 1 or 2
million
. In 2000, where the cellulosic gradually dropped to nearly 0
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.
After
this
, it considerably grew to 10
million
tons
in 2015,
whereas
, the wool steadily rose
at
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around 1
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ton
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in 2000 and
then
it remained unchanged
untill
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until
the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cotton, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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