the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
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The line graph draws the conclusion
of
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a survey about the value of three types of metals, like copper, nickel and zinc
how
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which
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varied in the months of 2014.
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, the graph provides information on nickel’s trend was a significant decline. The
nickel’s
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line shows that
was
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the most cost change between all of
metals
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the metals
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in the first month.
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, from February to June, it seems to decrease sharply to -3% . Before it remained stable in
next
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the next
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three months, there had risen
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June.
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of 2014, it appears to
reach
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a plateau after some fluctuation. The copper had a slight fall that year.In the first half of the years, its tendency happened to dip gently.
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, in the
last
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half
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it
growth
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gradually. In spite of these two,the zinc's pattern had a
stead
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surge slope,
although
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the line fluctuated considerably. It reached a peak
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3% in
second
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month
whereas
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it
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suddenly in
ninth
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the ninth
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of
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apply
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months
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month
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until October. After
that
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it
is
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skyrocketed to 2%.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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