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The diagram below shows the process of recycling plastic bottles.

The diagram below shows the process of recycling plastic bottles.
#process #plastic #bottles
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The provided diagram
illustrate
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 the recycling
process
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 of used
plastic
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bottles
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.
Overall
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, it is ahendi
process
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 which includes about 7 to 8 steps. Compressor,
chrusher
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crusher
,heater and so on are important and heavy
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 which are used in
this
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process
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. Looking at the
process
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 in detail, the recycling
process
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 begins with throwing
plastic
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bottles
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 into
dustbin
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a dustbin
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 after use.
Then
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 with the help of used rock the garbage from old is been are taken to
recycling
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the recycling
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 centre. Here, the garbage is checked well and
plastic
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bottles
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 are separated. The fourth step is compressing
bottles
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 into blocks.
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Further
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 the compressed blocks are sent for crushing.
The next step is
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 converting the blocks into tiny particles with
help
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the help
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 of
crusher
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a crusher
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 and
allow
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allowing
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 that particles into water for washing
purpose
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purposes
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. Once, the small parts are worst they
are send
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are sent
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for producing
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to produce
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plastic
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 pellets.
The following step is
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 hitting. Here, the
plastic
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 Pellets
a
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are a
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Rahi for producing raw materials. At least the raw materials are ready to produce
recycle
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recycled
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 products like box
bottles
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bag
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bags
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pen
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pens
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 and other stuff.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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