The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
The bar chart gives information about the five communities which gave some of
money
to developing nations from 2008 to 2011. Add an article
the money
Overall
, the dominant sponsor among them is organisation 2, the first and third Linking Words
Use synonyms
company
fluctuated, Fix the agreement mistake
companies
meanwhile
the Add a comma
meanwhile,
forth
and five Correct your spelling
fourth
business
experienced Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
the
downward trend.
Correct article usage
a
It is clear that
Linking Words
business
2 has the fastest growth during the Capitalize word
Business
periods
, 2008 to 2011. They started funding 1.3 Fix the agreement mistake
period
billion
dollars and reached the highest peak at 2.6 Use synonyms
at the end
of the period. The first and third Linking Words
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company
fluctuated . Fix the agreement mistake
companies
Company
1 started funding 0.6 Use synonyms
billion
dollars, it increased Use synonyms
almost
1 Change preposition
by almost
billion
before dropped and stayed at 0.7 Use synonyms
billion
. The same happened with Use synonyms
company
3, which started funding 1.5 Use synonyms
billion
and fluctuated during those 5 years. Use synonyms
Meanwhile
Add a comma
Meanwhile,
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company
4 and 5 Fix the agreement mistake
companies
has
Change the verb form
have
downside
trendCorrect article usage
a downside
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