The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to suprise birthday party for him. Write a letter to chris’s parents. In your lattter - Say why you think chris will enjoy the surprise party - Explain why you won’t be able to attent the party - Give details of a plan to see Chris at different time.

Dear Collins, I am writing for Chris’s surprise birthday
party
. I read
to
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your invitation card. First of all,
i
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I
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want to say thank you
beacuse
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because
you
invinted
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invented
invited
to me even if
i
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I
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am so far. I hope
chris
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Chris
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will be extremely happy because
,
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we know he is a
realy emational
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really emotional
guy.
In addition
,
i
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can’t join the
party
so ı feel
realy
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really
bad
however
i
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have
a good reasons
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a good reason
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.
Firstly
,
i
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looked plane ticket but ı
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find
some
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any
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. I found 1
days
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before the
party
but
this
ticket
expensive
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on the other hand
my home
to
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Australia
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is realy
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realy
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really
far. The flight takes 20 hours. Maybe
i
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will come next birthday if we plan early. Actually, we have a plan with Chris. He
want
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to
come
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my hometown.
He
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He is
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really interested
to
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my daily life, my culture,
my
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friends. He said that ‘
i
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I
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will come next month’
however
we
didin’t
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talk about
this
plan. I need to write to him.
To sum up
, enjoy the
party
and say hi
for
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me. I will send some
gift
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for
party
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the party
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. With Love, Kağan.
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task achievement
For task achievement, try to develop your reasons for not attending the party more fully, providing richer explanations that are relevant to the situation.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is informal, which suits the context of writing to a friend's parents. However, you could enhance the friendliness of the letter by including more polite expressions and showing more enthusiasm for the party initiative.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make sure your paragraphs are well-organized and each focuses on a single idea. The transitions between paragraphs need to be smoother to guide the reader through your points more naturally.
coherence cohesion
Double check your work for grammatical errors, and try to use a wider range of sentence structures and vocabulary to make your letter more impressive.
coherence cohesion
Start with a proper greeting, such as 'Dear Mr. and Mrs. Collins,' and end with an appropriate closing, like 'Best regards,' to adhere to the conventions of letter writing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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