The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The three pie charts illustrate the
consumption
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of 4 types of
food
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used in the world specifically in
China
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and
India
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in 2008. As
it
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can be seen, the figures are compared to the amounts of
food
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used in
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china
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China
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and
India
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in the same year. As an
overall
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trend, the two countries showed different
food
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consumption
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from the world average,
while
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processed
food
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consumption
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still had the largest percentages in all the three charts.
In particular
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, processed
food
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consumption
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was the highest in the
in the
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world, accounting for 41%, which was followed by vegetables and fruits at 29% and animal
food
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at a quarter. Only 4% consisted of nut and
seeds
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consumption
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.
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,
China
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used processed
food
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in the largest proportion of 39%. Animal
food
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showed the same figure as the world’s average, 25%. Vegetable and fruits
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used at 23%
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nuts and
seeds
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showed less than a half figure. In
India
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, both vegetable and processed
food
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were used the most in the year 2008 with percentages of 34% and 32% respectively, nuts and
seeds
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used in
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country showed the largest proportion among the three charts given, making up 19% at
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time. In conclusion, processed
food
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was the highest proportion used in both
China
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and
India
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whereas
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nuts and
seeds
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were the lowest.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, china, india, seeds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • average consumption
  • worldwide
  • data
  • comparison
  • differences
  • similarities
  • food items
  • categories
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • majority
  • minority
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