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Write a letter to the manager of the travel agency. In your letter, say about the holiday and where you stayed mention why you are unhappy about the hotel where you stayed say what you would like the travel agency to do

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Dear sir, My name is
Fency
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Fancy
 Stanly. I
was
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booked a trip to Wainfleet
on
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 2nd January to 5th January. You offered a five-star hotel for the stay. I am writing
this
 letter to inform
that
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 am very unsatisfactory about the motel you arranged
to
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 us. We are
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planning
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planned
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a
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the
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 long weekend
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on
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in
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the
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January spent over Wainfleet for
skeing
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skiing
seeing
activities and
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to enjoy
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enjoy
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 the winter season. We
stay
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are staying
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 in the ‘
skylon
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Skylon
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 palace’
for
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these days. Unfortunately am very unhappy
for
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 their services.
Firstly
, we got a very small room without a private washroom. You advertised that ‘large luxury room’ for the families.
Secondly
, the food was
also
 bad. We selected BBQ and stakes at the time of booking. But they served us for the noodles and salads. Actually, we are so disappointed with the hotel, so I
adviced
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advised
advise
 you to kindly refund our price and
also
 please advertise the information correctly. Accept my advice and do the needful Faithfully,
Fency
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Fancy
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coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphs are well-organized and each paragraph contains a single clear idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide clear details about the issues with the hotel to better support your dissatisfaction.
task achievement
Use appropriate formal language and maintain a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Add an appropriate closing salutation that matches the formal tone of the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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