the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates how much carbon dioxide emission was produced per person (in metric
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) between 1967 and 2007 in the United Kingdom,
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, Italy and Portugal.
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, it is readily apparent the British emitted the highest volume of CO2 through a given
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.
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, even in the first
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Portugal the least emitted. In the end, the country closed the gap with
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which had the second position early. In the first
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, Italy was in third place.
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, Italy managed to outrace
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from third to second place.
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, British approximately 11
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, around 1987 to 2007 British experienced a slight decrease to 9
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.
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was in second place from 1967 to 1977.
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,
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increased by 3
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, suddenly
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declined sharply to 7 and
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5
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in 2007.
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, Portugal had the lowest number of
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at the beginning of the
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, approximately only 1,8
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. In spite of that, Portugal started to rise smoothly and reached a peak at 4
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in 2017.Italy was levelled off with Portugal, which had 7
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in 2017.
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