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work is being done on the street where you live. The nosie is disturbing you. write a letter of complaint to your local council. In your letter -in troduce yourself -explain what the problem is -suggest solutions to the problem.

#work #street #nosie #complaint #council #-in #troduce #-explain #-suggest
Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am
wirting
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writing
this
 letter to inform you that the
nosie
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noise
nose
 of street
work
 under my apartment is very loud that to
effceted
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effected
effect
 my daily
live
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. Let me introduce myself first. My name is Mia, and I just moved from the Moon Twon to Sun Twon recently. Let me
clear
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 that I love Sun Town very much, but there has
a
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problem
bother
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that has been bothering
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 me a lot since
last
 month. The problem is the street
work
 behind the avenue where I lived was very
nosiy
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noisy
. They
propably
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probably
work
 every day even Sunday.
Consequently
, I cannot sleep late
then
. It
is very suffers
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 for me. All in all, I
geniuely
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genuinely
 suggest
that is
 there any possible to control the working time
on
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 Monday to Friday, from the morning 9a.m to the evening 5p.m. And no more street
work
 on
sunday
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Sunday
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please
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, please
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. I
Hope
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hope
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 that the Council can take
this
 problem seriously and look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mia Wan
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure proper introduction and conclusion in your letters - start with a clear statement of the letter's purpose and end with an appropriate closing and your name. Your current greeting and closing are acceptable, but can be more formal.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Organize your ideas clearly, with one main idea per paragraph. Ensure that you fully develop each point with explanations or examples, which was lacking in certain areas of your letter.
Complete Response
Make sure to answer all parts of the prompt completely. You addressed the main concerns but could have elaborated more on how the noise is affecting your life and presented more detailed, actionable solutions.
Suitable Writing Tone
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter. While your tone was generally suitable, there were moments where the writing could be more formal and respectful of the council's role.
Logical Structure
Work on the overall logical structure of the letter, ensuring that each point transitions smoothly to the next. The letter should flow coherently from the introduction to the conclusion, which you could strengthen.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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