The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The bar chart above illustrates the percentages of the citizens who were born in and outside of the
state
Australia
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of Australia
that
currently living in rural , urban or town Correct word choice
and
areas
since
1995 until 2010.
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from
It is clear that
the majority of the people who were born in or outside of the state
Australia
decided to live in urban Change preposition
of Australia
areas
compared to rural areas
with a 20% increase rate from 1995 to 2010.Moreover
, the public who was born outside of the state
Australia
and living in town Change preposition
of Australia
areas
remain
at the same proportion Wrong verb form
remained
with
10% since 1995 but it appears that Change preposition
at
slightly
decreased Correct pronoun usage
there slightly
in
figures for the people who were born in Change preposition
apply
Australia
with a 20% to 18% , respectively from 1995 to 2010.On the other hand
, Rural areas
are the least popular choices among the community with 40% shares declining to only 5% shares to
those who were born outside of the Change preposition
for
state
Australia
from 1995 to 2010.Change preposition
of Australia
Additionally
, same
goes Correct article usage
the same
to
those who were born in Change preposition
for
Australia
also
dropped in Add an article
the figure
a figure
figure
from 30% to 18% , respectively.
Fix the agreement mistake
figures
Overall
,most of the majority prefered
living in city Correct your spelling
preferred
areas
compared to rural areas
.Meanwhile, town areas
remain at the
steady rate Correct article usage
a
according to
the data above.Submitted by tifjong on
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