The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The bar chart above illustrates the percentages of the citizens who were born in and outside of the
state
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Australia
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of Australia
that
currently living in rural , urban or town Correct word choice
and
areas
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since
1995 until 2010.
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from
It is clear that
the majority of the people who were born in or outside of the Linking Words
state
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Australia
decided to live in urban Change preposition
of Australia
areas
compared to rural Use synonyms
areas
with a 20% increase rate from 1995 to 2010.Use synonyms
Moreover
, the public who was born outside of the Linking Words
state
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Australia
and living in town Change preposition
of Australia
areas
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remain
at the same proportion Wrong verb form
remained
with
10% since 1995 but it appears that Change preposition
at
slightly
decreased Correct pronoun usage
there slightly
in
figures for the people who were born in Change preposition
apply
Australia
with a 20% to 18% , respectively from 1995 to 2010.Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Rural Linking Words
areas
are the least popular choices among the community with 40% shares declining to only 5% shares Use synonyms
to
those who were born outside of the Change preposition
for
state
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Australia
from 1995 to 2010.Change preposition
of Australia
Additionally
, Linking Words
same
goes Correct article usage
the same
to
those who were born in Change preposition
for
Australia
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also
dropped in Linking Words
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the figure
a figure
figure
from 30% to 18% , respectively.
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figures
Overall
,most of the majority Linking Words
prefered
living in city Correct your spelling
preferred
areas
compared to rural Use synonyms
areas
.Meanwhile, town Use synonyms
areas
remain at Use synonyms
the
steady rate Correct article usage
a
according to
the data above.Linking Words
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