You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter. ▪️ Explain the important event. ▪️ Apologise for the situation. ▪️suggest a new arrangement.

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Dear Ramziddin, How are you? I

hope

you are well and I am nice. The reason why

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I am writing

this

letter is I arranged to visit your

home

but an important event at

home

now. Which is why, I must change the dates of the visit. I will not go

your

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home

, for there

are

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an important event

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home

This

event

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mother

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birthday.

That is

why, I will not go

your

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home

Whereas

, I buy

gift

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for my mother and I do not have free time. I am sorry, my friend, I can not go because I don't have free time, but I really

wanted

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to go to your city because I miss you so much. I

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we meet

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soon. I will definitely go to your place after my mother's birthday. I can't say the exact date, but I

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to see you in the next few weeks. I

hope

you accept my letter Best wishes, Bekhruz.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea - one paragraph for explaining the event, one for the apology, and one for the new arrangement. Avoid mixing ideas.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical structure by sequencing your ideas logically with appropriate paragraphing and use of cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'Therefore,' etc.

coherence cohesion

Start with a proper introduction and end with a suitable closing. While your greeting and sign-off are clear, they can be made more formal to suit the context of the letter.

task achievement

Address all parts of the task - give a clearer and more detailed explanation of the event, offer a sincere apology, and suggest new, specific date(s) for the visit.

task achievement

Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Formal or semi-formal language is preferable for this kind of correspondence, avoid colloquialisms or overly casual language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

162 words

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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter. ▪️ Explain the important event. ▪️ Apologise for the situation. ▪️suggest a new arrangement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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The housing shortage today in big cities can have severe social consequences. Many people think that only government actions can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweight the disavantages?

Some Countries have implemented mandatory community programs for young people. In these programs, children aged 16 to 18 do charity work, help old people or work with animals. What are some advantages and disadvantages for this for young people?