The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years
The
given
bar charts provide information about the conditions of individuals moving houses presented in percentages for four age groups.
Verb problem
apply
Overall
, for
the Change preposition
apply
three
younger age groups, that is
, 20 to 29, 30 to 39 and 40 to 49, they
share quite a similar pattern Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
those Change preposition
in that
moved
houses Correct pronoun usage
who moved
three
to five years
ago accounted for the largest shares, followed by individuals moving houses in the past three
years
, and for those not moving homes in the past five years
come the least. However
for the age group of 50 or older, 42% of people have not moved home in the Add a comma
However,
last
5 years
, though the people moved
homes in the Correct pronoun usage
who moved
last
three
to five years
shared just 1% less.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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