The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years

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bar charts provide information about the conditions of individuals moving houses presented in percentages for four age groups.

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for

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the

three

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younger age groups,

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, 20 to 29, 30 to 39 and 40 to 49,

they

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share quite a similar pattern

that

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in that

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those

moved

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who moved

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houses

three

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to five

years

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ago accounted for the largest shares, followed by individuals moving houses in the past

three

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years

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, and for those not moving homes in the past five

years

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come the least.

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for the age group of 50 or older, 42% of people have not moved home in the

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years

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, though the people

moved

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who moved

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homes in the

last

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three

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to five

years

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words three, years with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

124 words

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