The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who have moved house either in last 3 years,between 3years to 5 years,not within the last 5 years
The
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bar charts provide information about the conditions of individuals moving houses presented in percentages for four age groups.
Overall
,
for
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the
three
younger age groups,
that is
, 20 to 29, 30 to 39 and 40 to 49,
they
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share quite a similar pattern
that
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in that
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those
moved
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who moved
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houses
three
to five
years
ago accounted for the largest shares, followed by individuals moving houses in the past
three
years
, and for those not moving homes in the past five
years
come the least.
However
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for the age group of 50 or older, 42% of people have not moved home in the
last
5
years
, though the people
moved
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who moved
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homes in the
last
three
to five
years
shared just 1% less. Looking more specifically, over
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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