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Band 3.5

Some people argue that space explonation has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent to you agree with this? How do you think space explonation will change in the future?

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Have you ever thought you
can
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 live
in
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 another
planet
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? That's why some nations around the world
incline
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 toward making more and more
space
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 exploration,
while
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 a group of people believe
this
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 trend is just a pride
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 more. During
18th
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centeries
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centuries
cemeteries
less
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 countries had access to facilities for exploring
space
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, and when they
acheieved
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achieved
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 something new, for sure
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 success
considered
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 pride. But
in
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contrast
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 nowadays, companies are trying to fetch more information about the outer atmosphere, because they are curious.
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curiousity
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curiosity
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of where
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 we are
comming
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coming
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?
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, Elon Musk invests
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 various
space
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 projects and he claims that they
would
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 gain adequate knowledge about human
being
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beings
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 as soon as possible.
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, these kinds of projects and investments
about
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 the galaxy will be extended in the future. We all know that our
planet
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 is in danger of extinction and
one
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they
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 the Earth will not be a suitable place for humans to live.
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, scientists have been
comming
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coming
with
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 new ideas and methods to provide ways
for finding
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to find
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 a new
planet
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 to preserve
our
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 next generations.
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,
Hubbel
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the Hubbel
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 telescope
sended
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sent
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 to
the
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space
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for discovering
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to discover
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 a new
planet
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 to live
.
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on.
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 In conclusion, we cannot deny
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 governments just invest
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on
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space
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 exploration projects to make proud of themselves
, but
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proud, but
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 in the
last
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 decades
this
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 inclination has changed and
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scientists
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scientist
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scientists
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 are answering questions like where
is
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human's
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humans
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root
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, and where we can live
instead
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 of
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the
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Mother Earth?

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task achievement
Your essay shows an attempt to address the prompt, but the ideas need further development. The argument that space exploration has shifted from national pride to scientific curiosity is a good start, but more evidence and deeper analysis would strengthen this argument. Additionally, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a structure, but the logical flow could be improved. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the main idea. Employ cohesive devices effectively to link ideas and arguments throughout the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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