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Some people think living in a big city is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people contend that living in
the
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 huge
city
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 can
make
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 many problems
ralates
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to arise
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 for mental and physical health. There are different perspectives,
particular
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on
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in
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this
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 essay. I totally agree with
idea
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the idea
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 that
a
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an
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 urban area makes make harmful
for
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to
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citizen's
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citizens'
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helth
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health
. In the first place, there are many reasons for
this
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 problem, but mainly
is
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for
polluted
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pollution
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. In
come
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coming
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 from
large
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the large
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city
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cities
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 always conclude large the number of citizens, which require much
of
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fuels
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fuel
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 for vehicle driving.
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, urban
also
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 is the place that
concentrate
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concentrates
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 factories to adapt essential products for high
stardard
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standard
standards
 of living.
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, the factory releases a large
of
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apply
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amount of cacbon dioxide each year into
environment
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the environment
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, that
a
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the
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mainly
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main
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 reason for issue why
environment's
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the environment's
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 strength
be
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is
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 reduced
day-by-day
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day by day
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.
That is
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 why
government
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the government
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 is making some
restricts
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restrictions
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 to balance levels of
polluted
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pollution
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. In the second place,
life style
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lifestyle
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somtimes
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sometimes
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also
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is also
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a
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an
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 explanation
to damage
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for damaging
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 sleep for
morning
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the morning
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 working person. Living near places
such
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 as pubs and bars can result in significant ambient noise, especially considering their constant activity throughout the week. Almost
sound
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 come from activities that
be
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are
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 held around
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city
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the city
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 when any shop grand opening or sale day.
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,
environment
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environmental
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 noise
also
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make
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apply
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harmful
for
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to
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 citizens's
helth
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health
 since it
cause
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causes
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of
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apply
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stress or
disrupt
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disrupts
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 sleep. In conclusion, living in a large
city
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 can indeed pose significant challenges to both mental and physical well-being. Pollution and environmental noise are two prominent factors that contribute to these issues. It is essential for governments and individuals to address these concerns to ensure the health and well-being of urban residents.

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structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your opinion clearly. Each body paragraph should contain one main idea supported by specific examples or reasons. The conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
coherence
Improve the coherence of your essay by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly. Also, make sure each paragraph flows logically from one to the next, and ideas within paragraphs are clearly connected to each other.
examples
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task response
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