The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way the Stromer town has expanded since 1995.
Overall
, what stands out from the plan is that farmland and
forest
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forests
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are cut down
due to
urbanizing and modernizing the city. As can be seen, in 1995 there
were
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a large farmland, to the north of which
houses
are surrounded
with
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by
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a vast
forest
.
Also
evident is there are shops in the
center
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of town near the
houses
. At present, the farmland has been reduced and turned into
apartmants
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apartments
,
houses
, and shops.
Additionally
, a school is built in the city
center
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and
forest
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the forest
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transformed
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into shops on either side of the school. Another important fact is the
northen
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northern
forest
made
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was made
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into an airport, to the west of which is a small
farest
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back onto apartments.
Also
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the
houses
in the
north west
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northwest
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has
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been removed and apartments were constructed
instead
.
However
, a narrow part of the
forest
has
remaind
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remained
in the west of the city from south to the north.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words forest, houses with synonyms.
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