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The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.

The maps below show changes that took place at Brighton College between 1970 and 2010.
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The maps illustrate the changes
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occured
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occurred
 at Brighton College from 1970 to 2010.
Overall
, there
has
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have
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 been multiple changes from cutting down the trees to adding more facilities and a transportation line. As can be observed , from the north at the left
side
 of the university, a new building as the hall of residence has been built which used to be
an
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empty land.
Furthermore
, and new shopping center on the right
side
 of the college
have
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has
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 been made where the trees used to be.
However
, from the south on the port
side
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side,
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 a new restaurant and bars and clubs
have been
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were
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 constructed in 2010
while
 40 years ago there was not any facility near the beach
side
.
Moreover
, the public
road
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roads
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 close to the city centre have
gotten
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been
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 specialized to be only for
the
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apply
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pedestrians
only
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apply
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.
Nonetheless
, a new bike rental
schme
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scheme
 has started
it's
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its
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 business in the city centre continued by a new covered market on the
righ
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right
side
 of it. As for the old market beside it, it was replaced with a new shop.
Nevertheless
, the train station
got
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was
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 relocated from
east
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the east
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 to the centre next to a new
trainline
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train line
training
 which starts from the heart of the city and ends next to the college.
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