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You are going away from home for one week and you need to ask your neighbour to look after you house. Why you want to go away What you want your neighbour to look after If there are any problems then give instructions

#home #week #neighbour #house #instructions
Dear Happy, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. My correspondence of writing today is to request you to look after my driveway, as I am going to my home country for a week. I wasn’t aware of
this
 medical emergency for which I had to travel to my native country. My mother got a fracture
while
 doing household chores. In India, she lives alone, and nobody is there to look after her. It’s the peak winter season, and you know how often it snows here in Canada.
In addition
, we don’t shovel the snow within a day; it turns into black
ice
. After a week, it will be a disaster for me to get rid of that black
ice
. Can you please clean the snow from my driveway if it snows? I can understand that you have a hectic schedule. If by any chance you don’t get time, and the snow turns into
ice
, Can you sprinkle the salt on the
ice
? Which is right next to the porch. Thank you very much for helping me in
this
 challenging time. Yours truly Dhruvil
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Task Response
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