You have recently started attending hobby classes in your city. Your mother in your hometown wants to know about it. Write a letter to your mother. In the letter, mention: •What class are you taking? •How do you like it? •How long will you take the classes?
Dear Mom,
I hope
this
letter finds you in a radiant of health and good spirits. I am writing this
letter to let you I am enrolled in dance and music classes and the location is just on
walking distance.
Both dance and music Change preposition
within
is
a source of entertainment and knowledge as you know when I was a kid these activities really captivated me . Correct subject-verb agreement
are
In addition
, dance is a good physical exercise also
Correct pronoun usage
that also
keep
me fit and healthy. Music gives me inner soothing and Correct subject-verb agreement
keeps
upsurge
my intellectual memory , Correct subject-verb agreement
upsurges
thus
I really enjoy it because my teachers are extremely experienced and professional. I have seen positive difference
in my body and thoughts .
Fix the agreement mistake
differences
Furthermore
, my schedule is very simple , I go to the club twice in
a week for 3 to 4 hours as both classes Change preposition
apply
takes
one and Change the verb form
take
half
Correct article usage
a half
hour
and half Fix the agreement mistake
hours
hour
Correct article usage
an hour
is
for rest . On the other days , I focus on my studies which is equally crucial for me .
I am looking forward to hearing from you .
Yours truly,
HarvinderUnnecessary verb
apply
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or topic. Additionally, avoid merging multiple topics in one paragraph to maintain clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all aspects of the prompt in your response. In this case, more specific details about the hobby class duration would be beneficial.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more varied and complex sentence structures to enhance the flow of the letter. This will also demonstrate better language proficiency.
task achievement
Remember to include a proper closing salutation that matches the informal tone of your letter.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,