You have recently started attending hobby classes in your city. Your mother in your hometown wants to know about it. Write a letter to your mother. In the letter, mention: •What class are you taking? •How do you like it? •How long will you take the classes?

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Dear Mom, I hope
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letter finds you in a radiant of health and good spirits. I am writing
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letter to let you I am enrolled in dance and music classes and the location is just
on
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within
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walking distance. Both dance and music
is
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a source of entertainment and knowledge as you know when I was a kid these activities really captivated me .
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, dance is a good physical exercise
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also
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that also
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keep
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me fit and healthy. Music gives me inner soothing and
upsurge
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my intellectual memory ,
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I really enjoy it because my teachers are extremely experienced and professional. I have seen positive
difference
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differences
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in my body and thoughts .
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, my schedule is very simple , I go to the club twice
in
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a week for 3 to 4 hours as both classes
takes
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one and
half
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a half
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hour
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hours
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and half
hour
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an hour
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for rest . On the other days , I focus on my studies which is equally crucial for me . I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours truly, Harvinder
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or topic. Additionally, avoid merging multiple topics in one paragraph to maintain clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all aspects of the prompt in your response. In this case, more specific details about the hobby class duration would be beneficial.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more varied and complex sentence structures to enhance the flow of the letter. This will also demonstrate better language proficiency.
task achievement
Remember to include a proper closing salutation that matches the informal tone of your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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