As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In times like that, when technology is everywhere, it is not a shock that media is overpowering traditional
newspapers
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. Personally, I strongly agree that because of
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the popularity
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of the
internet
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,
newspapers
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are not use
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are not using
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anymore so much.
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Furthermore
, I think that
web
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the web
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is the
stronges
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strongest
stronger
competitor in all possible ways.
Firstly
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, the main reason for
that is
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the easy access.
People
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nowadays are very comfortable,
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which
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means that they prefer to check
news
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the news
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from home
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lab
work,
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then
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and then
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go out and buy
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a newspaper
the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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.
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Furthermore
,
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the intenet
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intenet
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Internet
,
beacuse
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because
of the algorithm, shows only
intresting
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interesting
things for the reader, so it is
easer
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easier
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.
Next
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The next
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example is that
newspapers
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are not eco-friendly. They use a lot of paper and most of them are
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published
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daily or weekly,
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depending
on the magazine.
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, a lot of
people
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that
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who
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care for our planet stopped buying them to reduce trash.
On the other hand
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, reading and looking at the screen
whole
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the whole
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day is not healthy for
population
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the population
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.
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Furthermore
, our society is addicted to electronics, so
its
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it
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only
make
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makes
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this
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problem bigger.
As a result
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,
people
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are so used to doing
everythink
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everything
on their phones that
newspapers
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are
becomig
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becoming
a thing of the past. The next generated problem from not reading papers is not knowing about
thinks
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things
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that are happening, by that
i
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I
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mean when
people
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read only
articules
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articles
that are
intrested
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interested
in, they are not making their
knowlatge
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knowledge
bigger.
Finally
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,
although
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I agree that
newspaper
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newspapers
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are staying in the past, I do not think that it is a good thing. From the argument, we can see that
electroncs
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electronics
make our life
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easier
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but with that a lot of consciences
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come
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but
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apply
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on
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from
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our education,
knowladge
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knowledge
and
heath
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health
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.
Therefore
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,
this
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is a hard topic because of the arguments but the
statment
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statement
is correct.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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