Every country in the world has problems with pollution and damage to the environment. Do you think these problems can be solved

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facing with most
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difficult
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human history_it is
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chage
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charge
. . It has
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more natural
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disasters
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flood
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,
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,
hurican
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hurricane
hurricanes
... and more
iportant
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important
is that
pollution
. It was damaged to the environment and our
planet
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Earth
. Can we
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this
problem and how to deal with it? We will discuss
this
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eassy
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essay
easy
. First of all, I think these problems can be
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solved
.
Firstly
, we could reduce gas and other
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resources
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the Earth.
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renewable energy
such
as solar, wind
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For example
, when I went back to Vietnam
last
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insted
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instead
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is a good sight of
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the environment and
save
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the
planet
. Because
this
one is not only bad for environment but
aslo
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also
harmful for us as well. Every year, there are more people getting the illness from
pollution
such
as cancer,
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that
throat
........
Secondly
, we have to stop burning
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garbage
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rice fields
,
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agriculture
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also
a
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main reason
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pollution
. It
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to believe it but
this
is true, when I went to India 2 years ago I saw a reality. When we burn something, the smoke will go to the sky-
this
is
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carbon
dioxide. The
planet
will get damaged
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these. When I lived there
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smoke
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and the air quality was so terrible, I had to wear 2 marks in
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order
to protect myself. When I read
on
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the newspaper _they said that 60
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of the
pollution
in India made by
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agriculture
. The Indian
govenment
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government
could not stop these
issuss
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issues
because
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farmers
tried to avoid
it
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them
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. They said
this
is their land,
they
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and they
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can do whatever they like. It was so terrible. To put the nut on the shell, we have to do
somthing
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something
in order to protect our
planet
earth
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and Earth is our home. If we do not do it, our children will die and have no
furure
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future
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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