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Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your job describe your new job tell him/her your other news Write at least 150 words

#friend #job #news
Dear Arun, I hope you doing well.
Firstly
 I want to you tell
something
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me something
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, about my situation. I
had
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have
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 changed my current job. Working, Since for five years no
increement
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increment
, no promotion that is the reason I found the new one.
Firstly
,my new workplace
very
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is very
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 near to my house.my position as hearing Executive sales manager,flexible time, even transport cost
also
i
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I
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 can save. They paid more than previously. collegues friendly approched, Every day
i
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I
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 meet various minds of people, approaching them with some difficulties ,but I really like to convince them and sell my product. time quite fastly go not boring
while
 working.
Finally
, I got
a
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apply
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another
messege
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message
 for you, my family is arranging my marriage soon.Promisely the date hasn't
confirmed
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been confirmed
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.
suppose
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 they planned March 2nd weekend. surely I invite you. you must attend with your wife. yours lovingly, Tharun
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Greeting and Closing
Begin your letter with a clear greeting such as 'Dear Arun,' and ensure you end with an appropriate closing such as 'Best wishes,' or 'Kind regards,'. This sets a friendly tone and frames your letter correctly.
Logical Structure
Divide your content into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea: one for explaining why you changed your job, another for describing your new job, and a final paragraph for other news. This helps in creating a strong logical structure and aids coherence.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph should be focused on a single idea to maintain coherence. Avoid mixing different topics within the same paragraph.
Complete Response
Cover all parts of the prompt thoroughly. The first part of the letter requires a more detailed explanation of why you changed your job. The second part about describing your new job should be more elaborative, mentioning specific details that you enjoy or find challenging in the new role. The final part, your other news, should be clear and should convey your excitement about the event (your marriage). This will ensure that you have fully met the task requirements.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of your writing is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend. However, try to maintain consistency in formality throughout the letter; avoid shifting between very casual and semi-formal tones.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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