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The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. Do you think this is positive and negative development?

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It is certainly true that many
people
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study
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online
education
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 of learning in their national schools.
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education
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 has
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 in an important manner in our country.
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 some
people
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 tend towards the viewpoint that it has very developing, and it has
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separating
 in the WorldWide. In my opinion,
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 progression which can lead to
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 different sciences. Surely,
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 for very comfortable, and their
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time is
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not wasted. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that their country, mainly,
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 underdevelopment of your schools. One of the main principal causes can be that the high quality of the
education
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 system decreases.
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occurence
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 of many diseases in humans.
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 eyesight, not being able to think broadly.
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 can be that. Many
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after
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neither online
education
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 or do not have school
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.
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, I agree with the viewpoint that
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online learning is convenient
,
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 and effective for many of us.
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, I believe
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this
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has
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give
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 us many results.
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the lead online
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 has many profits.
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, side from financial.
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,
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.
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, nowadays, I
also
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 feel that online learning is becoming more and more
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 in our lives. In conclusion, I believe that more
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methods
 of online studying will be introduced
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 years, and in ordinary schools, the quality of teaching decreases.I prefer to second sentences.

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