SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IN A CITY, THE BEAST WAY TO TRAVEL BY CAR, WHILE OTHER PEOPLE ARGUE THAT BICYCLES ARE A BETTER WAY OF TRAVELING IN A CITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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people

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around town. In

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people

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are always in a hurry to reach their destination.

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best

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option

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travelling.

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people

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facility. Whenever and whatever time is they can go easily. One of the best

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car

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long distance

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can get so much

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travels by

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city

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increasing traffic

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nature.

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people

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increase.

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to travel in a city. There are

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health will be good in condition.

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consquently

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consequently

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hometown

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. There are numerous drawbacks of these, in the emergency time,

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easy for all. In conclusion, my opinion is that

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these two statements are best on their

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but we can not stand by on a particular point. Both are important in

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life.

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accesive

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accessible

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bicycle

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a good idea for no traffic

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and physically fit.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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390 words

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IN A CITY, THE BEAST WAY TO TRAVEL BY CAR, WHILE OTHER PEOPLE ARGUE THAT BICYCLES ARE A BETTER WAY OF TRAVELING IN A CITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Online learning is better than classroom learning. Do you agree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

As a result of global warming, many countries are turning to nuclear power instead of burning fossil fuels such as coal, oil and natural gas. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?