SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IN A CITY, THE BEAST WAY TO TRAVEL BY CAR, WHILE OTHER PEOPLE ARGUE THAT BICYCLES ARE A BETTER WAY OF TRAVELING IN A CITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.
Some
people
think that while
travel by a
Correct article usage
apply
car
is a good way
to express yourself. Also
, others believe that via travel in
Change preposition
by
bicycle
is the best way
to roaming
around town. In Wrong verb form
roam
modern
era, Add an article
the modern
everybody
in
a rush so, some folks might be right on Add a missing verb
is in
this
point of view but there is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
others scenario
that Fix the agreement mistake
other scenarios
them
Correct pronoun usage
their
statment
is Correct your spelling
statement
also
correct. Hence
, I believe that both are correct with pros and cons and I will discuss both viwes
in the Correct your spelling
views
further
essay.
On the one hand, in a town, people
are always in a hurry to reach their destination. However
, they think car
is Add an article
the car
a car
best
option Change the article
the best
to
travelling. Change preposition
for
Advantages
of these that, by travelling by Fix the agreement mistake
Advantage
a
Remove the article
apply
car
, people
reached
Wrong verb form
reach
in
a very Change preposition
apply
comfort
facility. Whenever and whatever time is they can go easily. One of the best Replace the word
comfortable
reason
to Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
travelling
by Wrong verb form
travel
car
in
Correct your spelling
is
long distance
Add a hyphen
long-distance
journey
. Fix the agreement mistake
journeys
People
can get so much luxurity
rather than any other transport. A coin has always two Correct your spelling
luxury
side
, so if there Change to a plural noun
sides
is
pros, Change the verb form
are
as well as
cons are also
available. The cons are, firstly
, if everybody
travels by a
Remove the article
apply
car
in city
, there are Add an article
the city
incresing trafiic
and parking Correct your spelling
increasing traffic
issues
. Secondly
, pollution will be in larger amount
and harmful Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
for
Change preposition
to
the
nature. Correct article usage
apply
Thirdly
, people
might be forget
to stay fit and not Change the verb form
forget
doing
exercise. Wrong verb form
do
Moreover
, they can get sick and health issues
will be
increase.
Unnecessary verb
apply
On the other hand
, bicycles are the
marvelous Correct article usage
a
way
to travel in a city. There are varoius
advantages of these, Correct your spelling
various
First,
there are no traffic issues
, everbody
reaches in a time. Correct your spelling
everybody
Second,
Physical fitness will be grow
and Change the verb form
grow
everybody
keep fit themselves
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, everybody
health will be good in condition. Change noun form
everybody's
Third,
bicycle
is small space holding Add an article
the bicycle
a bicycle
consquently
, Correct your spelling
consequently
no
parking Correct word choice
and no
issues
in hometown
. There are numerous drawbacks of these, in the emergency time, Correct article usage
the hometown
bicycle
is not Add an article
the bicycle
a bicycle
the
good option. Correct article usage
a
For example
, if a person is handicapped then
bicycle
could not get workCorrect article usage
the bicycle
it
. Old age Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
are not physically
fit as young Rephrase
as physically
one
Fix the agreement mistake
ones
thus
, this
not
easy for all.
In conclusion, my opinion is thatAdd a missing verb
is not
,
these two statements are best on their Remove the comma
apply
way
but we can not stand by on a particular point. Both are important in day to day
life. Add a hyphen
day-to-day
Car
is very accesive
for Correct your spelling
accessible
everybody
and bicycle
is Correct article usage
a bicycle
also
a good idea for no traffic issues
and physically fit.Submitted by Rachna Academy on
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