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To solve the problem of traffic congestion govt should provide free public transport 24*7. To what extent do you agree or disagree. more disagree as there could be so many other ways to sort it out. It helps companies to change the working hours

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It is generally believed that the government should offer public transit without any charge to its citizens in order to regulate heavy influx.
However
 , other ague , including myself, there are other ways to minimise the jam
such
 as sustainable infrastructure and working odd hours.
To begin
 with, traffic congestion is a major issue in metropolitan cities since they are densely populated, where a majority of the masses commute on a daily basis by their own car because of work, creating more influx.
However
,
this
 dilemma can be sorted out if the high authorities initiate the project to develop the infrastructure , which includes spread-out roads , and pedestrian paths.
Additionally
, public transportation must
also
 introduced by the government unless people have more vehicles , it will cause heavy jams,but if the masses travel by public transport , which carries most people .
Consequently
 ,it will lead to a reduction in congestion.
For instance
 , a survey conducted by Hindustan Times, states that in urban Cities, jams have been reduced since the introduction of public transport especially the subway , which is sufficiently helpful to its nationals.
Moreover
 , one of the significant methods to reduce traffic is that the people who commute daily because of their work
,
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and are stuck in it since the construction going on during that time , in order to maintain
this
 , establishments should order that the work should start at off-peak hours to workers because the vehicle is not present over
this
 period and masses will not have trouble during the day.
As a result
 , it will help them to shrink the congestion.
Moreover
, high authorities should impose heavy fines who break the law of traffic lights as many vehicle owners are willing to violate its laws.
Hence
, it will
also
 be beneficial to control the heavy jam. In conclusion, free public transit is not a way to reduce the amount of influx .
By contrast
, good infrastructure and construction in off hours are the methods to regulate the jam
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • telecommuting
  • alternative transport
  • flexible work arrangements
  • staggered hours
  • investment
  • efficient
  • bike lanes
  • pedestrian paths
  • congestion charges
  • tolls
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