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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In the modern world, we observe a huge rise in
people
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's interest
about
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 the
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internet
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. Does
this
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 mean that magazines or
newspapers
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 are outdated? Experts have been discussing
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 issue for a long time. Some will agree with the statement,
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 there are opponents of
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 view. On the one hand,
due to
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 the
internet
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 plenty of printed editions were replaced by online sources. Nowadays, humans prefer to save their time and to find different information from the
internet
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.
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, my friend watches news on the YouTube and it is more comfortable
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 because he can
see
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 a video and learn new histories at the same time.
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, there are a number of social networks, where
people
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 consume data.
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, reading information from the network leads to saving money, because it is free.
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,
there
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is percentage of adults
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 paper editions rather than using the
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internet
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. There are mostly elderly
people
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.
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, my grandparents are not able to use social networks, because it is superb replicated for them.
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 why, reading
newspapers
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 for them is not outdated.
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, some individuals enjoy reading
newspapers
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 because of
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attracting
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 smell. All things considered, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is that today's
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public has plenty of ways
for consuming
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to consume
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 new data. From my point of view,
newspapers
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 will never become a thing of the past, because we always have a group of
people
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 who are not able to use the
internet
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.
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 why, I do not disagree with
this
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 statement.

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task achievement
Ensure you provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction that directly addresses the extent to which you agree or disagree with the given statement.
coherence and cohesion
Work on developing the body paragraphs with more focused and elaborated ideas, ensuring each paragraph centers around one main idea that contributes to your overall argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words to better connect ideas and paragraphs, thereby enhancing the flow and clarity of your arguments.
task achievement
Support your points with more detailed examples, drawing on personal, historical, or reported evidence to strengthen your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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