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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph shows detailed information about how many enquiries were received by the tourist office in a city during the six months.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a dramatic increase in the number of enquiries (in
person
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 and by
telephone
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)
while
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 the figure for (by
letter
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 and
e-mail
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) slightly decreased over the given period.
Moreover
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, it is
also
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 worth mentioning that "in
person
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" sent the largest application nearly throughout the period.
Initially
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, in January, "by
telephone
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" was the dominant figure in the number of requests with around 900."In
person
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 and by
letter
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 or
e-mail
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" accounted for about 400 and 800 respectively. The rate of enquiries was raised into two categories, "in
person
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 and by
telephone
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" to 1900 and 1600
million
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 respectively. The opposite was true "by the
letter
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 or
e-mail
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" of enquire and it slightly decreased to about 400.The application of
the
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people carried on to grow until June and reached 1900
million
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, being the largest enquire of all time provided.The figure for enquiring of the
telephone
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 started increasing in January and kept rising until
March
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 and reached 1000
million
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. That of
telephone
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,
on the other hand
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, started increasing in
March
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 until June and formed 1600
million
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.
Besides
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 that, by
letter
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 and
e-mail
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, applications started slightly decreasing in January till
March
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 and reached 600
million
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.
Furthermore
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, it continued decreasing from
March
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 to June and formed 400
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, telephone, letter, e-mail, million, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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