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Average rainfall for australia for last year by month

#rainfall #australia #year #month
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The bar chart illustrates the common
rainfall
happened
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that happened
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last
 year in Australia on
monthly
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a monthly
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 bases and
line
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the line
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graph
 depict aggregate
rainfall
 in
last
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the last
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 40 years on
month-by-
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a month-by-month
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month
bases
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basis
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.
Overall
,
January
month
 was higher for both years,
where as
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whereas
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 August
month
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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rainfall
 in the country. Both
graph
 and bar chart
,
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apply
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continues
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continue
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declined
Verb problem
to decline
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 mid
of
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apply
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the year. It is conspicuous that
January
month
 showed about 60
mm
 which slightly declined in February,
furthermore
, with little growth in March about 60mm
then
 dramatically decreased in April and some increase in May. August and October months were lowest
rainfall
. From October, it can be seen significantly increased and slightly declined in December. Probing ahead, for
last
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the last
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 40 years,
line
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the line
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graph
shown
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shows
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 about 80mm
rainfall
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of rainfall
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 in the
month
 of
January
 with
sharp
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a sharp
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declined
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decline
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 till April, which was less than 20mm and
May
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in May
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month
rainfall
 increased from 20mm to 40mm almost double. From May, it
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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started
declined
Wrong verb form
declining
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 till October, which is about 5mm, again it is noticed about 50mm
rainfall
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of rainfall
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 in November and
little
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a little
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 decrease in December. It can be seen both
bar
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the bar
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 chart and line
graph
 on higher in
January
month
 and
started
Add the particle
started to
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 decline up to September.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that all parts of the essay prompt are fully addressed, and provide a more detailed overview of the charts, including comparisons and trends.
coherence cohesion
For a better score in coherence and cohesion, structure your essay more logically by grouping related information together and using a wider range of cohesive devices.
coherence cohesion
Introduce a clear introductory paragraph that outlines the main features of the charts, followed by a concluding paragraph that summarizes the key points without introducing new information.
task achievement
Support your main points with more detailed explanations and specific data from the graphs to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the information presented.

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