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You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,

#trip #friend #photographs #photograph #copy #addresses #brendan
Dear Arun, Hi, I hope you are doing well and everything is good for you. It's a great pleasure writing
this
 letter.
Firstly
, I thank you for your hospitality, when I come to trip with your home town Delhi and surrounding areas
last
 time. Can send me some photos
while
 our vacation time captured by you
.
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 Recently my house was renovated, so I plan to post a big-size photo frame on my hall which you took
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photo
in
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 front of Tajmahal and over the water fountains side.
i
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 searched for those pictures on my floppy disk it's missing, I believe
this
 is still what you keeping somewhere in your memory card. can find that one and send it to me soon? I eagerly waiting for answers,and glad to receive from you a good massage. Thank you with a lot of love. best regards, Varun
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task response
Ensure the request for the photograph is clearly stated early in the letter to immediately address the primary task.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words and phrases to make the structure of your letter more coherent and help the reader follow your points easily.
coherence and cohesion
Remember to organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Be sure to paragraph your text clearly.
task response
Avoid informal language such as 'Hi' in semi-formal letter writing. Stick to a more consistent and formal tone throughout.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar errors to ensure clear communication. For example, 'message' instead of 'massage', 'on' instead of 'over', and 'you' instead of 'your'.
task response
Provide more detail about what happened to your copy of the photograph, as this is a requirement of the task.
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Make sure the letter ends with an appropriate closing phrase that matches the tone of the rest of the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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