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please describe the process of brick manufacturing?

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The given chart illustrates the stages of manufacture of
bricks
. The process itself begins with the excavation of
clay
. The raw material is transported to the production factory, where it undergoes a process of grinding and milling. At
this
 stage, additives,
such
 as water and sand, are mixed with the
clay
. The two types of brick are made after the way they formed. The most common method is moulding, where the
clay
 is pressed into brick-shaped moulds. Another method,
that
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 the
clay
 goes through a die to form brick shapes which are
then
 cut into
bricks
. After they must be dried before firing. The
bricks
 are stacked and transported to the dryer. The drying period can range from 24 to 48 hours. The dried
bricks
 are transported to large kilns where they are fired
firstly
 to moderate temperature - at 200 to 980 degrees Celsius, afterwards gaining the highest index within 870 – 1300 degrees Celsius. After the firing process is complete, the
bricks
 are allowed to cool down gradually inside the kiln. Once the
bricks
 have cooled, they are packaged for delivery.
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task achievement
Make sure to include an introduction that outlines the overall process before diving into the details, and a conclusion that summarizes the main stages or reflects on the process as a whole.
coherence cohesion
Organize information logically and use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas clearly. Consider using sequential words and phrases to guide the reader through the stages of the process.
task achievement
While describing the process, provide clear and specific examples or details that illustrate each stage. This can help the reader understand the process more vividly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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