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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
It is often argued by people that
home
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 and workplace should be organised and tidy. Being organised and tidy has its benefits like saving time, and energy and keeps humans
disease free
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.
This
 essay will discuss both views, and I will present my opinion later in the essay.
To begin
 with, we all have been taught the importance of becoming tidy and organised in
life
.
Additionally
, If we follow
tidiness
 and organised
life
, the chances of getting unproductive, and sick become zero. Everyone in society has to follow
tidiness
, and being organised is
today
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 norm of
the
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apply
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life
. There are various benefits of
tidiness
 and organised lifestyle. If we follow
tidiness
, the chance of illness becomes zero, and by following
organised
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an organised
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 lifestyle our productivity increases, which helps in official work. To illustrate,
post pandemic
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post-pandemic
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 everyone is expected to follow hygiene guidelines both at home and office.
However
, if we do not follow
tidiness
 and
organised
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 way of living, it will result in
impediment
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. Just imagine, if we are not organised in office work, it will impact our productivity and
increases
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 stress levels, which may affect our health.
Similarly
,
tidiness
 has its own benefits like
higher
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a higher
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 fitness level and
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. If we don’t follow
tidiness
, our fitness will dwindle, and we may fall sick.
Hence
, the importance of
tidiness
 and being organised is paramount.
For example
, in multinational companies’ employees are taught about organised
life
 and
tidiness
 so that there should not be
fall
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 in their efficiency. In conclusion,
although
 other skills like technical skills are important in
life
 still basic habits like
tidiness
, and organised
life
 are important
part
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 of our
life
. I believe that
tidiness
,
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 and organised
life
 are really crucial for success in
life
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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