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You travelled abroad and faced problems at airport. Write an letter to the airport manager and provide -your flight details -what is problem -suggest some improvements you want to see

#airport #manager #-your #flight #-what #-suggest #improvements
Dear Sir, I am writing with regard to
complaint
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the complaint
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the
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 issues that I faced at the airport
,
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 when I came to Canada
last
 month. My name is Yudhveer Singh, and I travelled from India to Canada. My flight number was AR-643, and it landed around
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7:00pm on August, 23. As soon as I was done with immigration, I headed to collect my luggage.
However
, I could not find one of my suitcases. After waiting for a
while
, I decided to go to the lost
nad
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 found department. Once, I reached there, I was informed that it
is
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 time for the lunch break, and I had to wait another hour.
Although
 I filed a complaint on that day, I have not
recieve
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received
 my bag yet. I would like you to do two things.
Firstly
, there should be at least one
employees
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at
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 the lost and found department so that nobody has to wait, after coming from
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 journey.
Secondly
, the department should send regular updates on what is happening to the lost luggage as I had to call two or three times a day. Thank you for taking into your
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consideration
. Yours Faithfully Yudhveer Singh
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structure
When you write a letter, it's important to structure your text clearly. Separate paragraphs can be used to delineate your flight details, the problems faced, and the improvements suggested. While your letter does include these elements, make sure each paragraph sticks to one main idea for clarity.
salutations
To begin and end your letter, use appropriate formal salutations and sign-offs. 'Dear Sir' or 'Dear Sir/Madam' is suitable for addressing the airport manager; however, a more appropriate ending would be 'Yours sincerely' instead of 'Yours Faithfully' as you have named the person at the beginning of the letter.
language accuracy
Your lay out of complaint and steps for improvement is clear, but you should avoid abbreviations like 'nad' instead of 'and' and check for typos like 'recieve' instead of 'receive' to enhance the professionalism of your letter.
coherence
Increasing coherence can be achieved by using linking words to connect sentences and ideas better. Also, ensuring that you use appropriate verb tenses consistently will increase the clarity of your explanations.
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