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Many cities are loosing natural environment due to the effect of over-population and ubranisation. In this essay will delve in to the benefits for protecting these places and put forward some practical solutions to tackle this issue

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Many
cities
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 are
loosing
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losing
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natural
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the natural
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 environment
due to
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 the effect of
over-population
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overpopulation
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 and
ubranisation
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urbanisation
.
In
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This
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this
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 essay will delve
in to
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into
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 the benefits
for
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of
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 protecting these places and put forward some practical solutions to tackle
this
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 issue First and foremost, one of the obvious advantages of protecting natural spots of
cities
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 by balancing population and urbanization is
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
pollution
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.
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, most of the
cities
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, indeed,
in
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are in
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 the clutches of
pollution
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, and recovering
natural
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the natural
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 environment of these
cities
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are
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is
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 crucial to
reduce
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reducing
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polluation
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pollution
.
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,
In
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the
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apply
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Berllin, significantly
reduce
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reduces
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the
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apply
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pollution
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 by taking measures for population control and
restrict
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restricting
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to
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apply
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new infrastructure development in the city.
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, the living
condition
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conditions
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 of the people would improve by protecting
nature
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the nature
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 of
cities
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. More green spaces can
be create
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create
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 better living
condition
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conditions
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 for the people. Natural spaces will help to improve
mental
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the mental
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 and physical health of the public.
Nevetheless
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Nevertheless
, there are some practical solutions to address
the
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apply
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urbanization and over-population in
cities
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.
Firstly
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,
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the relocatation
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relocatation
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relocation
 of enormous business establishments from the
cities
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 to suburbs or
countrysides
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countryside
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 would help to tackle
this
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 issue. In detail,
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the
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relocation of major
corporate
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corporations
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 from
cities
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 will reduce not only population but
also
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 infrastructural developments.
By doing
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this
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 would help to recover the natural beauty of
cities
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.
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, Zoho, a major software company,
relocate
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their
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its
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 corporate office to a village in
india
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India
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leads move thousands of employees to a village
instead
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 of living in the city.
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,
government
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the government
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 should create
law
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laws
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 to limit
the
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concrete buildings. The
environmental
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Environmentally
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 friendly infrastructures should be promoted and provide tax
benefites
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benefits
. In conclusion,
by
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apply
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reducing over-population and urbanization not only
reduce
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reduces
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pollution
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 but
also
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improve
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improves
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health
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the health
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 of
public
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the public
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. Ergo, the relocation of business organisations and green building concepts would help to address
this
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 issue

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structure
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should outline the main points to be discussed, while the conclusion should succinctly summarize the points made and restate the writer's position.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This includes words like 'additionally', 'for instance', and 'consequently' to make the text more coherent.
grammar
Work on grammar and punctuation. Incorrect use of articles, prepositions, and sentence structure detracts from the clarity of the response. Proofreading and revising for grammatical accuracy is essential.
examples
Expand on the examples given by providing more detail and explanation. While Zoho's relocation is a good example, explaining the impact it has on urban planning and the environment would strengthen the argument.
clarity
Be clear and precise in your ideas. Avoid repetition and unclear statements by specifying which pollution types you're referring to and how exactly pollution will be reduced.
sentence structure
Include a variety of sentence structures in your writing to showcase language ability. Combining simple, compound, and complex sentences will make the text more interesting and demonstrate control of English.

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