You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays. we use social
media
on
daily
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a daily
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bases
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basis
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,
especielly
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especially
to stay in contact with our family, friends or
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ones.
This
kind of communication helps
as
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when
traveling
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travelling
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or living abroad.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
,
its
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it
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also
change
people
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people's
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mind
on
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about
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talking face-to-face.
Firstly
,
lets
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let's
let us
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start with
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the advanatges
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advanatges
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advantages
, with
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the internet
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internet
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we can meet a lot of new, interesting,
people
from across the World, which can help us with our
knowlagde
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knowledge
of
language
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languages
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or cultures, which we could not do face-to-face from our home or work.
Next
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example is that
people
that
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who
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live
abrod
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abroad
without
the
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technology
could not
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cannot
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stay in daily touch with family.
Therefore
, when there
would be
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is
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a problem the
person
can always
facetime
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Facetime
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or video chat with someone,
this
kind of
possibilities
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possibility
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allow
to
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them to
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, technically, talk with seeing
eachother
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each other
, but of
cource
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course
it does not replace
real
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a real
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meeting.
On the other hand
, social
media
can deform the basic human communication. To
ilustarte
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illustrate
that
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, when
person
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a person
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only
use
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uses
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platforms to communicate with others, it can cause
that is
person
with
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to
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not know how to talk face-to-face and can get
a
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social anxiety with needs to be treated.
Therefore
, we need to have in mind
younger
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a younger
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population
that is
reaised
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realised
raised
with technology.
Next
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disadvanatge
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disadvantage
is that
people
do not feel
to meet
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like meeting
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in
person
right now. Friends that
lives
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live
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in the same city
prefure
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prefer
to play online games together or use
media
to talk.
This
could lead to being
addictive
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to technology and
secondly
to serious
menatl
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mental
health
problem
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problems
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,
such
a
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as
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depression.
Furthermore
, when kids meet someone on the internet we really do not know who that
person
really is or what intenses have.
To conclude
, I think that the disadvantage
are
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is
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much
more
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stronger
then
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than
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the
advanatge
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advantages
. Mental health and social
media
, in our times,
is
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are
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not a joke and we should
learn
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everyone about the consequences,
especielly
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especially
the kids,
that
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who
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are growing up with phones and computers.
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