You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays. we use social
media
on daily
Correct article usage
a daily
bases
, Fix the agreement mistake
basis
especielly
to stay in contact with our family, friends or Correct your spelling
especially
love
ones. Replace the word
loved
This
kind of communication helps as
when Change preposition
apply
traveling
or living abroad. Change the spelling
travelling
Unfortunatly
, Correct your spelling
Unfortunately
its
Correct pronoun usage
it
also
change people
mind Change noun form
people's
on
talking face-to-face.
Change preposition
about
Firstly
, lets
start with Replace the word
let's
let us
Correct article usage
the advanatges
advanatges
, with Correct your spelling
advantages
Add an article
the internet
internet
we can meet a lot of new, interesting, Capitalize word
Internet
people
from across the World, which can help us with our knowlagde
of Correct your spelling
knowledge
language
or cultures, which we could not do face-to-face from our home or work. Fix the agreement mistake
languages
Next
example is that Correct article usage
The next
people
that
live Correct pronoun usage
who
abrod
without Correct your spelling
abroad
the
technology Correct article usage
apply
could not
stay in daily touch with family. Wrong verb form
cannot
Therefore
, when there would be
a problem the Wrong verb form
is
person
can always facetime
or video chat with someone, Capitalize word
Facetime
this
kind of possibilities
allow Fix the agreement mistake
possibility
to
, technically, talk with seeing Correct pronoun usage
them to
eachother
, but of Correct your spelling
each other
cource
it does not replace Correct your spelling
course
real
meeting.
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a real
On the other hand
, social media
can deform the basic human communication. To ilustarte
Correct your spelling
illustrate
that
, when Correct pronoun usage
apply
person
only Add an article
a person
the person
use
platforms to communicate with others, it can cause Change the verb form
uses
that is
person
with
not know how to talk face-to-face and can get Change preposition
to
a
social anxiety with needs to be treated. Remove the article
apply
Therefore
, we need to have in mind younger
population Correct article usage
a younger
that is
reaised
with technology. Correct your spelling
realised
raised
Next
Correct article usage
The next
disadvanatge
is that Correct your spelling
disadvantage
people
do not feel to meet
in Change preposition
like meeting
person
right now. Friends that lives
in the same city Change the verb form
live
prefure
to play online games together or use Correct your spelling
prefer
media
to talk. This
could lead to being addictive
to technology and Replace the word
addicted
secondly
to serious menatl
health Correct your spelling
mental
problem
, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
a
depression. Correct your spelling
as
Furthermore
, when kids meet someone on the internet we really do not know who that person
really is or what intenses have.
To conclude
, I think that the disadvantage are
much Change the verb form
is
more
stronger Change the word
apply
then
the Replace the word
than
advanatge
. Mental health and social Correct your spelling
advantages
media
, in our times, is
not a joke and we should Correct subject-verb agreement
are
learn
everyone about the consequences, Verb problem
teach
especielly
the kids, Correct your spelling
especially
that
are growing up with phones and computers.Correct pronoun usage
who
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