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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The table
provide
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provides
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 the same
weekened
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week
 in
Sydney
, Australia and
London
, UK about the temperatures and
hours
 of daylight in December 2018.
Overall
, the
temperature
on
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in
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London
 was lower than
Sydney
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in Sydney
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.
Whereas
, the
temperature
on
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in
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 Sedney increased through the days
while
on
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in
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London
is
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it
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 fluctuated. The sunrise
on
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in
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London
was began
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began
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 later than
Sydney
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in Sydney
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 and it opposed
to
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apply
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the sunset which started
on
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in
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London
 earlier than
Sydney
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in Sydney
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. It can
deduced
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be deduced
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 from
this
 table that the
temperature
on
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in
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London
 was fluctuated, which was the maximum
began
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beginning
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with
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at
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 9C
then
increased
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increasing
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 steadily to 13C
then
falled
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fell
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 to 10C. The minimum degree observed was on
Satudurday
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Saturday
 19th which was 3C.
On the other hand
, the
temperature
on
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in
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Sydney
 was
doubled
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double
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than
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that
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London
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in London
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, It started
with
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at
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 26C on
friday
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Friday
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then
 it had
slow
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a slow
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increased
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reached
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and reached
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 on Sunday 31C. On Friday 28th was the lowest degree
recoarded
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recorded
on
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in
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Sydney
 by 17C. The Sunrise started at 05:45
on
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in
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Sydney
while
on
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in
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London
 started after around 2
hours
 at 8:05. The Sunset on
London
 began after the Sunrise about 8
hours
 which was the doubled on
Sydney
 which was almost taken 14
hours
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, london, hours, temperature, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The tables compare
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • ranged from
  • consistently high
  • slight increase
  • remained stable
  • significantly fewer
  • enjoyed
  • overall
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