Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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helpful than
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alone online at home.
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with
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, though I will discuss in
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online classes
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prepared well like
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mathematical
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to solve more than one equation and can see different view about
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issue through a lot of
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and can share your opinion.
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the internet is poor and the
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stop and you can not complete your lesson so you will find
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to predict what
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said and in
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you find a lot of messages that contain different
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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pandemic, the whole world
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to learn online. The kids
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to understand what they learn, and they can not
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and
study
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home that not
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, in
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the
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the technology with traditional
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in class can get more
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efficient
learning. The students when they handle
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together
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also
can level up of educational
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achievement
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help each other and
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to get high
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grades
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rather than when
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students
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who study
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at home online can not learn
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societal qualities.
To conclude
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,
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learning online
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that bad
conversely
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a lot of advantages, but in my
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view,
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the
classroom
is more beneficial than it.
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Task Achievement
Ensure you thoroughly address the extent to which you agree with the statement, providing a balanced view before concluding with your opinion.
Task Achievement
Use clear topic sentences to start each paragraph which directly relate to the question, followed by explanations and examples to support your view.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by adding transition phrases or discourse markers between sentences and paragraphs to improve readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check your essay for an introduction and conclusion that clearly state your position and summarise your main points. Both need to be more fully developed.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your arguments, quantifying your experiences or citing recognizable statistics or studies if possible.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Misuse of words and errors in sentence structure can obscure meaning and detract from the overall coherence of the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical interaction
  • Fosters
  • Communication skills
  • Structured environment
  • Discipline
  • Time management
  • Immediate feedback
  • Clarification
  • Motivate
  • Competitive environment
  • Achievement
  • Accommodate
  • Group discussions
  • Experiments
  • Presentations
  • Flexibility
  • Convenience
  • Commitments
  • Remote areas
  • Digital platforms
  • Interactive simulations
  • Social anxiety
  • Participate
  • Engage
  • Diverse learning paces
  • Learning styles
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