The diagrams show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The diagrams show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The given diagram illustrates how
salmon
grows in natural sources, from start to finish.  At a glance, it can be observed that there are three steps for the production, beginning with laying some eggs in an upper zone of a
river
,
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and culminating in an adult
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of
salmon
which can reproduce the first
phrase
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phase
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of its life cycle.
Initially
, it is evident that after getting out from the eggs which have been layed for approximately 5-6 months at the upper zone of a
river
, some fry salmons, a young state of a
salmon
which is the outcome of its initial phrase, move to a lower part of a
river
which has a faster flowing of the water, and live there for around four years before turning into a smolt
salmon
which is approximtely 12-15 cm. long. In the subsequent stage, those smolt salmons relocate their inhabitance to live in an open sea.
Subsequently
, after living there for five years, these salmons eventually transform into an adult stage;
furthermore
, they come back to the upper zone of a
river
to produce some eggs for
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next generation.
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