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Some people that professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 argue that
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 certain professionals must
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 in the
country
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 where they obtained their training
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 others argue that, they should have the
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 to serve where they like. In
this
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 essay. I will analytically discuss both the views and come up with my own opinion. It is often said that
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 some careers
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 as medical practitioners and engineers should be employed in the
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 where they have been trained.
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 is mainly because the government usually spends huge amounts of money on training and internships, aiming at
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turn they will
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 the
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 the budget report for the commercial year 2023/2024 in the United Kingdom, the government had allocated more than 20% of their budget for the training of undergraduates.
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, some
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 believe that
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people
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 including doctors and engineers should be allowed to
work
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 wherever they wish. Indeed, anyone has the
right
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 to
work
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 in their preferred
country
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, because it is a basic human
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. The ultimate goal of each and everyone is to have a happy and enjoyable life.
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, if some professionals are offered a competitive wage, with more benefits by another
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 because of their talent and experience they tend to migrate.
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, the New York Times magazine revealed that
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 more than one-fifth of engineers in the USA are composed of foreign nationalities, especially from Asian countries. In conclusion, some
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 believe that
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 it is necessary for certain professions to serve the
country
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 where they received their training
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 others argue that, they have the
right
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 to choose where they are going to serve. In my opinion, it is not career-specific and everyone must
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 in the
country
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 where they got the training, as long as they receive satisfactory income and other competitive advantages.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear structural organization, with separate paragraphs for the introduction, each viewpoint, and the conclusion. Add linking words to improve the connectivity between ideas and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
To better clarify your position, refine your argument in the conclusion, making it a clear, direct response to the statement given in the prompt. Address the essay question more precisely in both the introduction and the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource & Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Use a variety of complex sentence structures and incorporate a range of vocabulary to fully illustrate your thoughts. Avoid over-simplifying complex ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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