The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
of fast
food
(
Pizza
,
Hamburgers
,
Fish
and Chips) among young people in Australia between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, there was a significant increase in fast
food
consumption
such
as
Hamburgers
and
Pizza
while
the
other
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others
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decreased year by year. In 1975, the number of fast
food
consumption
both
Pizza
and
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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moderately increased
while
Fish
and Chips decreased gradually. In the meantime,
Hamburgers
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Hamburger
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rates reached a peak in 1985 followed by
Pizza
in 1995. On
other
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the other
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hand, between 1980 to 1985
Fish
and Cips increased slowly but decreased sharply from 1985 to 2000. Between 1985 and 2000,
Pizza
reached the highest
consumption
of nearly 100 per year among the others followed by
Hamburgers
at nearly 85 rates. In
contrary
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contrast
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,
Fish
and Chips between 1985 and 2000 decreased sharply from 90 to 38 rates and remained as the lowest fast
food
consumption
among the others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, pizza, hamburgers, fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Consumption
  • Fast food
  • Australian teenagers
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Significant rise/decline
  • Compare
  • Contrast
  • Implications
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fish and chips
  • Data points
  • Period (time frame)
  • 25-year period
  • Paraphrase
  • Notable features
  • General increase
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