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It is said that people’s life now is becoming more and more stressful. What are the causes and how to solve it?

#people’s #life
There
in
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is
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 no doubt that these days people are facing
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of things
during
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in
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 their
life
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lives
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. Nowadays,
humans
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human
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 life
stared
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starts
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 to be hard and stressful. In
this
 essay, I am going to mention the reasons and the solution
of
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to
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 that change.
Work
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The work
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 environment
become
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becomes
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 tired day by day.
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, when people are dealing with their daily activities they will face a lot of things that may pull their power to make them tired and
fell
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feel
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exhusted
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exhausted
.
Also
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up
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 everything that has been stated so far,
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structure
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introduction
Your introduction should clearly introduce the topic and outline the main points that you will discuss in the essay. Writing a thesis statement can help clarify your position.
cohesion
Use a range of linking words to connect ideas and ensure easy readability. Make sure each paragraph flows logically from one to the next.
main points
Develop your main points with detailed explanations, reasons, and relevant examples. Each body paragraph should focus on a single main idea, and this idea should be clear to the reader.
conclusion
Your essay must be complete. Be sure to provide a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your overall opinion without introducing new information.
task response
Answer all parts of the question fully. Make sure you include causes and solutions to the issue of stress as the task requires. Include specific examples to support your ideas.
completion
To acheive a higher score, ensure there are no unfinished sentences and that the essay does not end abruptly. Complete all thoughts and sentences to communicate your ideas coherently.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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