in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry, why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

In the current era, the scarcity of
food
has always been an issue globally, especially in developing countries.
However
, there have been many technologies used in agricultural production. Despite
this
, a huge number of
people
around the world still
face lacking
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food
and stay hungry. In
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essay, the reasons
of
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this
situation and some solutions will be considered. First and foremost, One of the first problems of the scarcity of
food
is lots of areas in the
war
. The
war
brings
people
unsafe
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, they are afraid of working outside, and the
war
destroys the natural resources,
such
as water, good soil, and
healthy
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environment. In
this
way, it prevents crops from being planted and harvested. Another problem that needs to be considered
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the government does not have enough money to support citizens to plant agriculture. In Syria, there is a lot of
war
there, and a variety of local
people
always go hungry. Most of the local
people
are very poor, they have
no
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much money to buy
food
. And local farmers do not have enough payment to purchase agricultural facilities.
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, the local government is poor as well. To reduce more and more
people
facing lacking
food
problems. A possible solution to
this
problem would be
some
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of
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attention to supporting more money to farmers in agriculture. The government can reduce the agricultural goods tax and publish some policies.
For example
, they can encourage and reward farmers with equipment and free seed distribution.
Furthermore
, One immediate practical solution is
to
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more governments and individuals are calling for respect for every human life to reduce unnecessary wars. In summary, agricultural skills and facilities have been improved,
however
, there are still many areas facing poverty and
war
. They can not afford the cost
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new technology. In the future, I do hope human beings have no
war
and everywhere is safe and rich.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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