in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry, why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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In the current era, the scarcity of
food
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has always been an issue globally, especially in developing countries.
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, there have been many technologies used in agricultural production. Despite
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, a huge number of
people
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around the world still
face lacking
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food
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and stay hungry. In
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essay, the reasons
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situation and some solutions will be considered. First and foremost, One of the first problems of the scarcity of
food
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is lots of areas in the
war
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. The
war
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brings
people
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unsafe
live
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, they are afraid of working outside, and the
war
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destroys the natural resources,
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as water, good soil, and
healthy
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environment. In
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way, it prevents crops from being planted and harvested. Another problem that needs to be considered
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the government does not have enough money to support citizens to plant agriculture. In Syria, there is a lot of
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there, and a variety of local
people
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always go hungry. Most of the local
people
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are very poor, they have
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much money to buy
food
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. And local farmers do not have enough payment to purchase agricultural facilities.
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, the local government is poor as well. To reduce more and more
people
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facing lacking
food
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problems. A possible solution to
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problem would be
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of
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the area
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area
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pay
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attention to supporting more money to farmers in agriculture. The government can reduce the agricultural goods tax and publish some policies.
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, they can encourage and reward farmers with equipment and free seed distribution.
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, One immediate practical solution is
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more governments and individuals are calling for respect for every human life to reduce unnecessary wars. In summary, agricultural skills and facilities have been improved,
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, there are still many areas facing poverty and
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. They can not afford the cost
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new technology. In the future, I do hope human beings have no
war
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and everywhere is safe and rich.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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