Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. apologize for damaging the product explain what happened say how are you going to fix the issue

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Dear John, Hello, hope you are well. I am writing to thousand apologies for your laptop problem. Please accept my sincerest apologies for damaging the laptop that you gave me. I am taking full responsibility for all the damage and will surely cover all the required expenses to repair it. I know that was my mistake, as I could not take care of your device. I was working on the computer

that

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and

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It happened so fast. I am very sorry that I think the keyboard is

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the only

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only

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the only

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part

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apply

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that is

damaged

due to

water spillage and everything else is working completely fine. I have consulted with my uncle about potential expenses as he is an electrical technician. I will visit his shop to fix

tomorrow

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it tomorrow

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. Please do not worry about it ! I will get back the laptop by

this

weekend. I hope you will accept my apologies. Yours sincerely, Samandar

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coherence cohesion

Ensure your letter has a logical start, development, and conclusion. The current structure is a bit fragmented, and you can improve paragraphing by clearly separating your introduction, the explanation of the incident, and your proposed solution.

coherence cohesion

Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Start the letter with a clear introduction and apology, follow with a detailed explanation of what happened, and end with a paragraph specifying how you intend to resolve the issue.

coherence cohesion

Begin your letter with a proper greeting and end with an appropriate closing. 'Hello' is informal and casual; consider starting with 'Dear [Friend's Name],' followed by a comma. End with a more formal 'Best regards' or 'Kind regards' instead of 'Yours sincerely,' which is reserved for formal letters to persons whose name you know.

task achievement

Address all parts of the task. You apologized and explained what happened but could be more specific in explaining how you will fix the issue. You mention taking it to your uncle but give more details on the expected outcome and timeline.

task achievement

The tone in an informal letter to a friend is generally conversational and warm. While your letter has a suitable tone of regret and responsibility, try to make it sound more personal and less formal to fit the context of a letter to a friend.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

152 words

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