The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay.

The charts below show the number of reasons why some people leave UK and why some people choose to stay.
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The pie charts illustrate
about
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several causes why a number of individuals have
tendency
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a tendency
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to live United Kingdom and some reasons of
people
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to
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leave that country.
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, it can be seen that
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to abandon
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UK
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the UK
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and stay in
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country
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because
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family & friends, employment and financial reasons. Looking in more detail, there were some factors which contributed in terms of why residents
to leave
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Britain and
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in
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another state. Mostly, about 37% of
people
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desired to go to another nation because they looked for quality of life. The second major factor was
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financial matters that
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required in order to
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the basic requirement of life, and about 24%
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people
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were included in
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factor. On
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, 12%
individuals
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desire to abandon
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UK
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the UK
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because of
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and 18% because of employment.
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, Family and friends were
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for
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9%
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people
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of people
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to leave
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leaving
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UK
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the UK
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. In the meantime, other
people
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also
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have many
consideration
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considerations
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to still stay in
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UK
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the UK
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.
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The majority
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people
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of people
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about 43% had
tendency
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to live
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UK
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the UK
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because of the existence of their family and friends in
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place.
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, the social life matter became the second reason for 21% of
people
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to keep their existence in
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UK
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the UK
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. Folks
also
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considered
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other factors
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such
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as 15% for
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financial resources or employment and 11% for language.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emigration
  • Immigration
  • Expat (expatriate)
  • Lifestyle
  • Migration
  • Demographics
  • Push factors
  • Pull factors
  • Job security
  • Health care system
  • Family ties
  • Career advancement
  • Socio-economic status
  • Cultural familiarity
  • Political climate
  • Economic conditions
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