The provider diagram shows the process of drinking water made from rainwater in Australian town
The provided diagram depicts the
process
of providing portable water
by storing and treating rainwater in Australian
town.
Add an article
an Australian
Overall
, it is lengthy
Add an article
a lengthy
process
. This
purifying process
includes several equipment such
as water
filter storage tanks chemicals and so on.
Rainfall is the starting point of this
process
. All terraces and roofs are connected with hollow pipes and as the rainfall occurs the water
passes from these hollow pipes. Then
, water
filter is used to remove some harmful substances from Add an article
a water
the water
water
. Correct article usage
the water
The next step is
storing filtered water
. As soon as the process
of filtration complete
the Add a missing verb
is complete
water
is allowed to fall in a huge storage water
tank
. Here water
is stored for ample
period of time.
Correct article usage
an ample
The following step is
treating the stored water
. Here, water
is allow
to flow to another Change the verb form
is allowed
tank
from storage
Correct article usage
the storage
tank
. In this
tank
, some chemicals are added into
the Change preposition
to
water
which makes rainwater portable. Finally
after some span treated Add a comma
Finally,
water
is passed to homes of citizens as drinkable water
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