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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.
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The given
line
 chart illustrates the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in various
countries
, measured in billions of US
dollar
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dollars
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, from 2010 to 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
line
 for Nepal was far lower than the other three
countries
, and remained stable throughout the
period
. Looking more closely at the
line
 graph, the figure for Malaysia was higher than the remaining
countries
 over the time frame, which stood at nearly 250
billion
dollar
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 in the
beginnig
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beginning
,
then
 increased until 2014, and reached approximately 350
billion
dollar
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at
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 that year;
howeve
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however
, a decline was seen between 2014 and 2015,
hence
 the figure ended up just below than 300
billion
dollar
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. In terms of Bangladesh and Pakistan, these two
countries
 showed similar trends, both of them gradually increased over the
period
.
While
 the
line
 for Pakistan stood at nearly 180
billion
dollar
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,
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 and finished at nearly 280
billion
dollar
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dollars
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, the figure for Bangladesh represented
in
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just above 100
billion
dollar
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 in 2010, and almost doubled
it
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over the
period
.
Finally
, the
line
 for Nepal represented
in
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just above the zero
line
 over the time frame, and any change was not seen in the given
period
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, countries, dollar, period, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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