The older generations tend to have very traditional idea about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
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struggled
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elder
one comes with Correct your spelling
older
a
new advice or method. It is undeniable that sometimes these methods work, but Correct article usage
apply
young
generation usually Correct article usage
the young
find
them boring and unpleasant. Change the verb form
finds
Therefore
, it seems old people
’s sayings may not acceptable
in Add a missing verb
be acceptable
this
modern era.
Old experiences,
and traditions mean old knowledge and data that are not suitable for up-to-date Remove the comma
apply
people
’s lifestyle
. During recent years, new individuals may have new Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
character
and thoughts, so in Fix the agreement mistake
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this
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they can easily reject what an old person says. Add a comma
case,
For instance
, in this
new modern world, if people
ask help
or advice Change preposition
for help
of
their parents about their marriage issue they may find their attitudes funny , or hilarious. Because, new couples have fresh thoughts and beliefs, so they will not endure any situation like their parents.
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from
Additionally
, old people
are more traditional than younger ones. While
,
it seems some Remove the comma
apply
of
traditions have been diminishing over Change preposition
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years
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the years
especially
among Add the comma(s)
, especially
younger
generation. Add an article
the younger
This
declination originates from accessing a massive amount of valid data throughout the Internet. So, it would be impossible for old people
to persuade a young man or woman to act how
they have said. Correct word choice
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For example
, traditional families would not let their young children to
live alone before their marriage. Change the verb form
apply
Whereas
, now younger community have an adequate valid information
about positive sides of it, like independency.
In conclusion, we cannot neglect what old Remove the article
adequate valid information
a piece of adequate valid information
people
are trying to provide to us, because occasionally their thought
work greatly. But, young ones should be able to distinguish between Fix the agreement mistake
thoughts
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