The older generations tend to have very traditional idea about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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a lot when a younger person
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in a situation and an
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new advice or method. It is undeniable that sometimes these methods work, but
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generation usually
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them boring and unpleasant.
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, it seems old
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and traditions mean old knowledge and data that are not suitable for up-to-date
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. During recent years, new individuals may have new
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and thoughts, so in
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they can easily reject what an old person says.
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or advice
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their parents about their marriage issue they may find their attitudes funny , or hilarious. Because, new couples have fresh thoughts and beliefs, so they will not endure any situation like their parents.
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, old
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are more traditional than younger ones.
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it seems some
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traditions have been diminishing over
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generation.
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declination originates from accessing a massive amount of valid data throughout the Internet. So, it would be impossible for old
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to persuade a young man or woman to act
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they have said.
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, traditional families would not let their young children
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live alone before their marriage.
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, now younger community have
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about positive sides of it, like independency. In conclusion, we cannot neglect what old
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are trying to provide to us, because occasionally their
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work greatly. But, young ones should be able to distinguish between
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old thoughts and new ones to make a decision.
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