More and more prisons are being built to house the world's criminals, and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. However, others feel that tr assistance is what is required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is often argued that keeping the world's
criminals
inside
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prison
is the solution
of
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crime
throughout the world,
while
some
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that proper
medication
and psychological assistance play
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role
to resolve
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in resolving
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crime
issue
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issues
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.
Although
sometimes
criminals
may
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in
prison
to follow the
ruless
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rules
but
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I believe that with proper treatment and support by surrounding
this
problem can be solved.
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imprisonment always has
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negetive
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negative
impact on human
behavior
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.Rather than making it a person helpful to become a good person,it always
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people in
bad
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way.In case
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is kept in
the
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prison
,
so that
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it is mostly possible,that he/she may come in
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in contact
with
others
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criminals
,who have been in
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prison
for a longer time.In that,it is mostly possible that
people
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behaviour got impacted by other prisoners which will make it impossible to come out from crimes.
Although
,
criminals
conduct a
crime
and if they will put in the
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imparisonment
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imprisonment
,
then
the
socity
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society
will not accept
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properly ,as the
criminak
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criminal
passed
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a long time
at
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prison
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the prison
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with other
criminals
.As
,
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they are not socially accepted,
so
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it is hard for them to come out from criminal acts rather
thay
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they
will continue doing
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kind of
activities
. The most effective way to make a criminal out of
this
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bad
activities
is
medication
and psychological assistance from
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family and society.If anyone involved themselves in criminal
activities
,
then
without sending
then
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them
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in
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prison
it is better to consult with the criminal and make them understand
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the fault.It should be understood
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a way that they feel guilty for their act.If
family
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and
nearerone
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nearer one
including social organizations can make
criminal
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criminals
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understand,that because of
the
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criminal
activities
,what losses
world
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is facing.
Moreover
, it is the duty of every social organization that everyone in the society should not expend any negative thoughts on any criminal who will go through
a
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rehabilitation.
On the other hand
,presently medical science has improved a lot of technology and various
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kinds
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of
medication
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has
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been invented to support mentally and physically.
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,we can
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a number of
rehave
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have
center
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,where
where
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a number of
criminal
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criminals
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is kept for psychological treatment.
Overall
,the
result
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results
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of
this
type of
medication
and psychological enters are satisfactory. To sum
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can be said that,
instead
of sending
criminals
for
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a long time
of
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jail for their
crime
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crimes
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,if we can make them
undersatand
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understand
about
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their
fault
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faults
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by supporting
psychologically
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them psychologically
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and
undergoes through
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proper medications
this
problem can be eradicated easily.
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