These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?
Teaching used to be one of the most prestigious jobs in many countries in the past.
However
, nowadays, it has become less attractive which means not many young people aspire to become teachers
. In my view, there are several factors leading to this
phenomena
and I will discuss some of them in the following paragraphs Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
along with
suggesting some solutions.
We should consider several reasons why today's youngsters do not want to choose a teaching career. Firstly
, a low salary is a major deterrent for many young people. Instead
, they look for another profession which offers a
higher pay Correct article usage
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as well as
perks. Furthermore
, ill- behaved
students can cause stress Correct your spelling
ill-behaved
in
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on
teachers
and makes
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make
this
job quite exhausting and stressful. Another reason is extremely
heavy workload that school Add an article
an extremely
the extremely
teachers
have to deal with in their daily lives, being usually snowed under with paperwork and other responsibilities, which means they do not have enough time and energy to spend with their families. As a result
, in many countries, including the UK, teachers
organize strikes, with some even quitting to get another job.
On the other hand
, governments can take several measures to alleviate this
problem. First of all, teachers
should be offered a
reasonable pay compared to other professions with similar responsibilities. BecauseCorrect article usage
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,
there are many people who work in different fields Remove the comma
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such
as in banks or other sectors who receive higher renumeration
. Another solution would be Correct your spelling
remuneration
making
parents fully responsible for their children's Change the verb form
to make
behavior
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behaviour
School
should provide knowledge and education Fix the agreement mistake
Schools
instead
of focusing on the upbringing of students. A solution for the third problem is to reduce the amount of work pressure from
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on
teachers
by hiring more assistants. This
will help teachers
cut the burden of the job and make this
profession less stressful.
In conclusion, education plays a vital role in every society's development. Therefore
, governments should take necessary steps in dealing with issues in education, including teaching by offering higher salaries, reducing workload and so on.Submitted by muhammadrizoabduxalimov017 on
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Introduction
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position and outlines the key points that you will be discussing in your essay.
Body Paragraphs
Develop each main point with clear, relevant examples and explanations. Currently, some ideas are stated without providing concrete evidence or examples to support them.
Conclusion
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Task Achievement
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Your opinion
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